I'm Sorry...

[luco]

I really do not like this page ;___; I'm going to have to beg your forgivness for the quality of the art today. I guess the weather and stuff has really gotten me down.

Will probably re-do this page in the future if it bothers people, but for now I'll leave it so that I can advance the story....





Now to finish packing, and tommorrow I'll be back at school finally.

Comments

[fieryredqueen.livejournal.com]

well, since you seem so unhappy with the page, i scrutinized it for Stuff What Bothers Me. at first glance i couldn't even find anything. second and third glance, and every subsequent glance, the only panel i could find anything in was the first one. nothing i can see in any of the other panels bothers me--in fact, the third panel, which you seemed worried about, is the best one by far. i don't have a problem with chopper's legs at all--it looks like a natural, tense reaction to someone suddenly leaning on your head hard enough to squish your hat. even underwater. sanji's pose is really great, very casual and natural--the way he holds his weed away from his mouth is particularly nice--and his expression is really great. his expression in the second panel is great too, and it's a nice profile shot. chopper's expressions in the first and last panel are as adorable and expressive as they should be. so i think you are being too hard on yourself about this page. it's really good, as all of the pages have been, and probably will be.

as for Stuff What Bothers Me in the first panel, it's not even anything major, though it might take me a bit of room to describe it. the main thing is chopper's body--i'm assuming that the right side of the panel is showing his torso leading up to the bend in his waist? it's kind of hard to tell--there isn't much contrast, and no differentiation between textures--fur and scales, presumably. i know the style you're working in is minimal when it comes to textural detail, but some more contrast at least might define the shape a little better. or redo the panel and frame it differently--it's kind of a weird angle. (i've never done manga and so i don't know how feasible it is to just redo one panel.) also, and this is pretty subjective, when i try to follow the line of chopper's torso from where i presume his collarbones would be all the way to the bend in his waist, his torso seems way too long. while, by contrast, his hat seems too short. but the main focus of the page is chopper's watery, pouty expression, and as far as i'm concerned, that's flawless.

[fieryredqueen.livejournal.com]

looking over everyone else's comments, i feel kind of guilty for not simply praising you with great praise, as you deserve to be. i definitely don't want to discourage you.

[luco-millian.livejournal.com]

You looked and tried to help me figure out what's bothering me and that means as much as all the praise does to me. It may just be that small thing with Chopper in the first panel. It could be that the shading is a little too sloppy or busy in some areas, or it could be that I spent too much time drawing the third panel.

I'm still not sure exactly what it is, but you've helped me find a direction to look in and I'm thankful for that ^___^

[fieryredqueen.livejournal.com]

i'm really glad if what i say is helpful to you in any way. that's what it's all about, after all. :)