School work again.

[luco]

So, if our teacher had been healthy, today i would have done my story pitch. But seeing as he is not, I rushed and panicked for nothing...

And thus was left with all these little drawings and no one to show them to, so you guys get tortured once again! Aren't you lucky? Well, I actually turned them all into one big drawing with text so that you can follow along...but really, because I didn't get to do the pitch and get opinions from classmates and teachers, I figured I'd see what you guys thought of it. This is just the really rough basics of the story, so feel free to ask questions, state opinions etc. I'm going to consider this a test run for when I do have to present it.

And I apologize for the quality of the drawings as they were rushed and done completely with a ball point pen. Also, let me know if you can figure out what time period and where it takes place.




Not as cheerful as what I normally do, but I guess it kind of gives you an idea of the kind of mood and mind set I've been in lately. . .

Comments

[onikotsu.livejournal.com]

I'm thinking before cars um Revlotionary war or a little later? I can't date any of thos but that's my mind's putting the story. And many it's in England? I think it was very good, the story would flow nicer maybe with some connecting scenes between some of the panels but if it's not needed to flow prefectly then I think it's fine. You left me wondering what Death and the insane woman were up to. But I liked it and as usually your art s amzing exspecially if this is done with a ballpoint. ^_^

P.S: Do you know any time you'll be on AIM? I really miss talking to you but I understand you're busy so I'm asking.

[luco-millian.livejournal.com]

Just give me some ideas of where more panels are needed. I want to make this story work as best I can, so any place it seems jumpy, let me know. As for AIM, how ever much work I get done by Monday will set how much free time I actually have, so we shall see. Sorry I can't give a better answer then that.

[onikotsu.livejournal.com]

The search for the right person seemed a little quick. Other than that it flows. It's fine I understand that sometimes you can;t tell when you'll have time, I hope I get to talk to you Monday then. ^__^